Language Exercises (Being Concise)

Exercise Contents Writing Workbook Writing Courses Language Exercises: Being Precise and Clear Being Familiar Being Fluid

In the paragraph below, click on the first word or phrase that can be cut or reduced. Once you have located that word or phrase, you will view a discussion of that reduction and then see an edited version of the paragraph. At that point, click on the next word or phrase that can be cut or reduced. For this exercise to work effectively, please remove the underlining-of-links option from your browser's list of preferences.

The objective of this subsection is to present experimental data that can be used in conjunction with a comprehensive computational modeling study to determine a rather detailed understanding of whether explosions could occur in the fuel tank environments of Boeing 747s. Temperature measurements made in the course of a Boeing 747's flight revealed the presence of high-temperature conditions in the tank during the take-off phase of the flight. Congratulations, you have made a first cut. This subsection presents experimental data that can be used in conjunction with a comprehensive computational modeling study to determine a rather detailed understanding of whether explosions could occur in the fuel tank environments of Boeing 747s. Temperature measurements made in the course of a Boeing 747's flight revealed the presence of high-temperature conditions in the tank during the take-off phase of the flight. Congratulations, you have made a second cut. This subsection presents experimental data that can be used with a comprehensive computational modeling study to determine a rather detailed understanding of whether explosions could occur in the fuel tank environments of Boeing 747s. a Boeing 747's flight revealed the presence of high-temperature conditions in the tank during the take-off phase of the flight. Congratulations, you have made a third cut. This subsection presents experimental data that can be used with a computational model to determine a rather detailed understanding of whether explosions could occur in the fuel tank environments of Boeing 747s. Temperature measurements made in the course of a Boeing 747's flight revealed the presence of high-temperature conditions in the tank during the take-off phase of the flight. Congratulations, you have made a fourth cut. This subsection presents experimental data that can be used with a computational model to determine whether explosions could occur in the fuel tank environments of Boeing 747s. Temperature measurements made in the course of a Boeing 747's flight revealed the presence of high-temperature conditions in the tank during the take-off phase of the flight. Congratulations, you have made a fifth cut. This subsection presents experimental data that can be used with a computational model to determine whether explosions could occur in the fuel tanks of Boeing 747s. Temperature measurements made in the course of a Boeing 747's flight revealed the presence of high-temperature conditions in the tank during the take-off phase of the flight. Congratulations, you have made a sixth cut. This subsection presents experimental data that can be used with a computational model to determine whether explosions could occur in the fuel tanks of Boeing 747s. Measurements during a Boeing 747's flight revealed the presence of high-temperature conditions in the tank during the take-off phase of the flight. Congratulations, you have made a seventh cut. This subsection presents experimental data that can be used with a computational model to determine whether explosions could occur in the fuel tanks of Boeing 747s. Measurements during a Boeing 747's flight revealed high-temperature conditions in the tank during the take-off phase of the flight. Congratulations, you have made an eighth cut. This subsection presents experimental data that can be used with a computational model to determine whether explosions could occur in the fuel tanks of Boeing 747s. Measurements during a Boeing 747's flight revealed high temperatures in the tank during the take-off phase of the flight. Congratulations, you have made the sentences concise. This subsection presents experimental data that can be used with a computational model to determine whether explosions could occur in the fuel tanks of Boeing 747s. Measurements during a Boeing 747's flight revealed high temperatures in the tank during take-off. You have reached the end of this exercise. Top of Page

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